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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #members #students
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In
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 modern era, experts throughout the world have risen their voice for gender equality in
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most areas. Some people believe that both
gender
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genders
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 has to get the same number of chances for enrolment in
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prestigious
universities
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.
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, another group of thinkers denied with
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statement
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. But asked, I support the laid view. My justification of the given
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ensuing
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 paragraphs. On the one hand, most of the
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equality in each sector irrespective
education
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of education
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, defence, job and so on.
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, in the present time
females
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 carried out
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more intelligence and enthusiasm for study compared to
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males.
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, research published by mark
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Northwood
 in
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the USA
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 states that 69% of university
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scholars
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 are
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 which is
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 significant and vital
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 for most educational sectors to recruit both group members without creating any bias.
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, higher authorities of the
universities
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 must need to broaden their thinking level to allow female
individuals
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 to graduate.
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,
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 if women get the chance to get themselves
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, they will carry
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 message to their
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 generation too. Ultimately,
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 would bring
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 literacy rate
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 the globe.
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, some of the
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. The foremost
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females
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 are not physically capable as male does. These reasons led that
woman
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women
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 cannot tolerate
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practical exposure in
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 market.
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 held by the group of
individuals
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 which does not allow
females
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 to enrol in
universities
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 as they stand against
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women education. To conclude, I can firmly support that
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woman should get
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an equal
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universities
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, as
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the current
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 world
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females
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 in every sector
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 are education, defence, and workplace. Another prime
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 to let me
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agree with
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the given
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statement
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 is
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females
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 could be the
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 for increasing
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 literacy rate on
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the planet
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 in the upcoming time.
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