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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, by increasing difficulties of
life
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,
children
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 can not care for their
parents
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 when they are old enough to do personal activities.
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 nursing
homes
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 have lots of benefits and appear as a suitable approach for both
children
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 and
parents
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 unfortunately it is associated with far disadvantages.
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 essay will mention both aspects of the topic under discussion. On the one hand,
parents
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 encounter compensatable harm to leaving their
children
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 and continuing in the care
homes
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. They are not in touch with their own family longer where they have spent the majority of their
life
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 with their own
children
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.
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, the relationship between them will be narrowed dramatically that without a doubt, undesirable emotional effects will get into them.
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, it is incredible for
parents
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 to accept the fact that
children
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 are not responsible while
parents
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 have done the opposite from child's birth till now.
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,
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 is reasonable for
parents
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 to believe the reality of
life
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 has been tough enough for them and it is not fairly to end their
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 in
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 way.
On the other hand
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, some both
parents
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 and
children
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 will be a far pleasure to live in nursing
homes
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 because of its especially benefits.
Parents
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 sense clearly that there are much more attentions which are paid for them. They benefit lots of options that those places are facilitated with that their usage are particularly for old people whereas it is not possible to state them in common houses,
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 as medical devices.
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, in these places, all of the people that are looked after are in the same range of ages.
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 fact results in they can make friends easily and
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 spend their time with somebody who can understand each other completely. In conclusion, due to the remediation of problems that are created by caring for old
parents
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, people have to select an efficient approach. Even though nursing
homes
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 by far is one of the best selections, many unbelievable problems are involved with them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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