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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, by increasing difficulties of
life
,
children
 can not care for their
parents
 when they are old enough to do personal activities.
Although
 nursing
homes
 have lots of benefits and appear as a suitable approach for both
children
 and
parents
 unfortunately it is associated with far disadvantages.
This
 essay will mention both aspects of the topic under discussion. On the one hand,
parents
 encounter compensatable harm to leaving their
children
 and continuing in the care
homes
. They are not in touch with their own family longer where they have spent the majority of their
life
 with their own
children
.
As a result
, the relationship between them will be narrowed dramatically that without a doubt, undesirable emotional effects will get into them.
However
, it is incredible for
parents
 to accept the fact that
children
 are not responsible while
parents
 have done the opposite from child's birth till now.
Consequently
,
this
 is reasonable for
parents
 to believe the reality of
life
 has been tough enough for them and it is not fairly to end their
life
 in
this
 way.
On the other hand
, some both
parents
 and
children
 will be a far pleasure to live in nursing
homes
 because of its especially benefits.
Parents
 sense clearly that there are much more attentions which are paid for them. They benefit lots of options that those places are facilitated with that their usage are particularly for old people whereas it is not possible to state them in common houses,
such
 as medical devices.
However
, in these places, all of the people that are looked after are in the same range of ages.
This
 fact results in they can make friends easily and
then
 spend their time with somebody who can understand each other completely. In conclusion, due to the remediation of problems that are created by caring for old
parents
, people have to select an efficient approach. Even though nursing
homes
 by far is one of the best selections, many unbelievable problems are involved with them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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