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Some people think that children nowadays have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most
children
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 seem to travel
to
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home from
school
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 along with the sunset, which is much earlier than their
counterpart
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 in the past. For
this
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 reason, some people argue that
children
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 are too free at present. In the past, after
school
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, there was a lot of
housework
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waiting
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children
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 to help their
parents
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 -- taking care of little sister or brother and cooking
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. Those things took a large percentage of so-called free time and
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children
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 had not much
freedom
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 to focus on their own hobbies even after class.
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,
parents
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 nowadays will try their best or even employ a servant to do all
housework
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 so that
children
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 only need to concentrate on their
study
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.
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, when they go home from
school
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, what is
waiting
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 them is clean, tidy rooms and well-prepared meals. That means they can enjoy more
freedom
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 to do what they are interested in.
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, even though there is no need for
children
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 to devote themselves to
housework
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any more
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, there is much more homework.
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, because of the delightful desire of every parent that their offspring will be superior, they often
enroll
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 their
children
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 to take some after-class lessons to assist them to consolidate what they have learned at
school
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. What is more, at weekend some
children
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 even hurry to several
specialty
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 training classes that their
parents
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 force them to attend. Indeed, they possess much less
freedom
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. In conclusion, I strongly think that
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 current
children
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 do not need to do
housework
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, they have less
freedom
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 and more pressure from
parents
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 and society, because their schedule after class arranged by their mom or dad is much too full.

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