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Many people think that government should spend more money on providing faster means of public transport. Some others think that there are important priorities (e.g: cost, environment). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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What the government should give the highest priority when creating public
transport
. Some people think that the union should spend more money on providing faster means of public
transport
.
On the other hand
, others believe that the authority should focus more on other important aspects
such
 as cost or environment.
This
 essay, as my opinion leads to, will try to elaborate on both points of view and my own idea with some considerations. To commence with, it is true that time is money and there are some people who think that they do not want to spend time going to work as little time as possible.
In other words
, faster transportation is very effective for people and the government should spend more money.
For example
, there are both normal
trains
 and bullet
trains
 in Japan. The fees of the latter
trains
 are not cheap but these vehicles are three times faster than normal
trains
 which you usually use. In Japanese society, a lot of workers use bullet
trains
 to go to work every morning and they consider bullets
trains
 very convenient.
On the other hand
, I personally believe that it should be noted that the government must focus more on the environment.
That is
 to say, more eco-friendly
trains
 will be required in the near future. It is mainly because human activities are the main cause of global warming. To give an illustration of
this
, a lot of means of
transport
 generate carbon dioxide, leading to the increase in the levels of carbon dioxide in the Earth's atmosphere.
Therefore
, there is no doubt that the environmental issue is one of the serious problems all over the globe and the union should deal with
this
 problem. To sum up, it is true that both points are crucial when it comes to developing means of public
transport
;
however
, I personally think that measures against environmental problems are given the highest priority in today's world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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