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Some people believe that a person’s culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about the impact of birthplace on their
culture
. While the
country
 of origin would have little effect on our
culture
, I believe that it has more influenced by where we live. On the one hand, the birthplace would have impacts on some aspects of a person’s
culture
. When an individual is born in a
country
, some of her or his characteristics are created. Language is one of the examples that children did not be able to select from early ages. Indeed, the way they speak is determined by their birthplaces. Religion is another example of features that people could not choose themselves in their childhood.
For instance
, an adult girl who was born and grown in an Islamic community has to have a cover on her head in public places.
Therefore
, the
country
 of origin might influence a person’s
culture
 to some extent.
On the other hand
, the environment and society that someone lives in would have more impacts on their
culture
.
Firstly
, the regulations of society would affect an individual’s behaviour.
For instance
, a woman who has to wear hijabs would be able to wear clothes freely if she lives in another
country
.
Secondly
, the hometown customs would
also
 affect the person’s
culture
.
For example
, if a person migrates to the Netherland, they would change the way they commute to work, riding a bicycle
instead
 of driving their car.
Finally
, the people’s lifestyle could
also
 be altered in the exposure to the new environment. In
such
 cases, they might tend to consume more or less healthy foods. In conclusion,
although
 the
culture
 of people is affected by their
country
 of origin, it seems to me that their living places have more impact on it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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