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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

#illiteracy #concern #countries #world #effects #people #society
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In the contemporary era developed
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countries
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 citizens get
education
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 without any challenges, in comparison with
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countries
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, where being able to read and write
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 possible for the vast majority of the
society
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. The issues of poor academic development
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 debated today, and there are numerous
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causes
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 of
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on
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 of the
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 of the children’s disability to write is that advanced technologies, especially PC and laptops, are used widely in schools and
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 buildings, meaning that all homework, all assignments are not in written form anymore, everything now is typed by keyboards.
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 who used to type for 40 minutes with flying
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 might not be able to get
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 score if he wrote by
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 child cannot write down, but perfectly uses keyboard
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, another well-known root is insufficient resources,
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countries
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, where educated people want to immigrate to the most developed
countries
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, only volunteers educate the population of
Catva
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Latvia
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, which locates in Nigeria, so
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 of professionals is the main factor of illiteracy of that region. Regarding
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 effect on
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a group
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 of interested people, probably the significant one
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 that uneducated crowd
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 be
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 by
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the cruel
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leader
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 could be done through false statements about law, politics and budget usage to destroy the human being.
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 rate done by adults increased since
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 youngsters to break the law to be famous. Uncontrolled materials on social networks lead to that negative results.
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, another widely-observed impact on
society
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 may be losing
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history, and
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 our dignity and integrity. Where not researching our past due to disability to read longer than 2 pages leads to total unknowledge of the
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society
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 roots. To illustrate, members of
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 tribe
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 able to read or write as
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 ancestors did, so in the nearest future people would think about Maya as fairytales. To conclude, it is evident that there are a lot of
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 of lack of education for kids,
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 as simplified high technologies and deficit of proper mentors, and all the
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 have
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 effects on individuals and
society
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  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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