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Today, more and more students are choosing to move to other countries to have higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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In recent times there has been an increase in international
students
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 going to other
countries
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 to study. In my opinion, I agree that the advantages of international
students
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 studying in other
countries
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 outweigh its disadvantages.
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 essay will discuss the economic and academic advantages an international student will gain from studying abroad, and the negative impact on the
countries
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 of international
students
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 studying in other
countries
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. The increase in
students
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 studying abroad will be a significant source of income to the growth of the
economy
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 of their intending
countries
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.
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 is so because the more
students
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 choose to study in other
countries
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 the more money is being pumped into the
economy
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 which in turn boosts the
countries
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economy
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 by providing jobs for lecturers.
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, Australia is one of the leading destinations for international
students
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 with thousands and thousands of
students
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 coming in each year which serves as a major revenue for Australia.
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, the influx of international
students
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 in other
countries
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 will boost the academic standards and ranking of that
country
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.
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, Australia has been one of the major destinations for international
students
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,
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 has made schools in the
country
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to
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be among the very best of schools in the world.
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, the educational growth of a
country
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 can be factored upon the number of international
students
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 in that
country
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.
Nevertheless
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, the major drawback to
students
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 studying abroad is, causing economic stagnation in their own
country
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.
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, the money
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 being used to pay for schools in the
country
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 so it circulates in the
economy
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 is being taken out of the
country
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 and being used to grow other
countries
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.
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,
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 would cripple any
country
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 over time because there is less of the
countries
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 money in circulation in the
country
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. In conclusion, as much as international
students
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 studying abroad has its disadvantages, I believe
students
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 should still study abroad.
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