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Today, more and more students are choosing to move to other countries to have higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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In recent times there has been an increase in international
students
 going to other
countries
 to study. In my opinion, I agree that the advantages of international
students
 studying in other
countries
 outweigh its disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss the economic and academic advantages an international student will gain from studying abroad, and the negative impact on the
countries
 of international
students
 studying in other
countries
. The increase in
students
 studying abroad will be a significant source of income to the growth of the
economy
 of their intending
countries
.
This
 is so because the more
students
 choose to study in other
countries
 the more money is being pumped into the
economy
 which in turn boosts the
countries
economy
 by providing jobs for lecturers.
For example
, Australia is one of the leading destinations for international
students
 with thousands and thousands of
students
 coming in each year which serves as a major revenue for Australia.
Furthermore
, the influx of international
students
 in other
countries
 will boost the academic standards and ranking of that
country
.
For instance
, Australia has been one of the major destinations for international
students
,
this
 has made schools in the
country
to
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be among the very best of schools in the world.
Hence
, the educational growth of a
country
 can be factored upon the number of international
students
 in that
country
.
Nevertheless
, the major drawback to
students
 studying abroad is, causing economic stagnation in their own
country
.
For instance
, the money
that is
 being used to pay for schools in the
country
 so it circulates in the
economy
 is being taken out of the
country
 and being used to grow other
countries
.
Hence
,
this
 would cripple any
country
 over time because there is less of the
countries
 money in circulation in the
country
. In conclusion, as much as international
students
 studying abroad has its disadvantages, I believe
students
 should still study abroad.
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