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Band 6.5

You had traveled by air and had an unpleasant flight. Write a letter to the airline company Manager about the following: - Describe the flight - Explain what was the problem -Ask how this issue can be solved

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Dear sir, I am writing
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 letter to complain about some bad experiences on the
flight
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 that I was in
last
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 few days. I was on a
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 from Toronto to Edmonton on Jan 25 at 7 PM, and the reservation code is WS123. My seat was 12D, which is near the window, and it was a 4-hour
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. Unfortunately, during the 4 hours that I was on the
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, I did not have any drinks for food serving. There was only 1 staff on that
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 to service the customers, and she was not able to serve all of the customers.
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, I didn't have any drink or food served to me during the
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. I would like to give you the feedback, that you should increase more staff on each
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 who enable to serve all of the customers immediately
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 and make their
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 more comfortable and pleasant. Yours sincerely, Tram Vu

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs. For example, you could have one paragraph describing the flight, another explaining the problem, and a third suggesting a solution.
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Use more formal language in your complaint to align with the writing task's context. For instance, instead of 'bad experiences', you could say 'unpleasant experiences'.
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You provided specific details about the flight, including the date, destination, and reservation code, which helps the reader understand your situation clearly.
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The tone of your letter is courteous and respectful, which is important when making a complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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