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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some authorities think that secondary school must include unpaid community service as compulsory to everyone .I agree with the given statement because
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 inspires
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 to help their younger schoolmates ,
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 , it brings holistic development to them .
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 , problem
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 may start to feel stress can be eliminated by the appropriate guidance of teachers . The main reason is that
children
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 understand the value of helping each other ,
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 the way of sharing their knowledge .When they start taking part in
charity
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 tasks without payment they get information about their social needs and
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 understand their own value that how they can help many people .to give a clear example , many schools have started programs in vacation time when
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 of a higher school visit the ruler area and teach
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 .
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 activity helps
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 to realise their knowledge can bring helps to other poor
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 who are unable to visit the school every day or who are not very clever to understand the subject easily. The
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 main reason is complete development involves not only study but
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 life lessons .
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 work can help the people who really need it , and by getting aware of people's needs,
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 may get help with what they need to do in the future parallel with their career .
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 , In many ,schools once a year , organize a donation program in which student set up their stall and at the end of the day , they donate their earned money for other poor
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 well-being .
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 kind of activity inspired
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 to be helpful to others in future
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 . In my view , Even there are some drawbacks of unpaid community service which create a burden in
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 life ,
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 ,
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 can be eliminated by teachers by giving the right advice and explaining the importance of
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 work .Because appropriate guidance can help
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 to make good decisions for society. In conclusion ,
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 there is a negligible disadvantage of unpaid
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 work ,
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 is essential for
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 holistic development , and for increasing their knowledge about the value of help.
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