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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industries and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent these?

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Nowadays, in our development
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 we can experience one worldwide issue with . These problems are declining
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quality
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 and
water
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quality
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 essay will suggest measures to solve these two problems. A number of developing countries are confronted with declining
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 of
air
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 and
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. In order to prevent
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 to contaminate
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 and
water
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, they should be set up on the outskirts of the city. The toxins released by
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 can cause various ailments. The government can impose restrictions on
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 regarding the release of chemicals in
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 bodies.
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, in Global Climate Summit, many developing nations joined hands to launch punitive measures to control the deteriorating
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 of
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, people can be made aware of the rising concern of
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 and
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quality
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 from
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 and construction. Unless awareness is generated among the masses,a collective approach is undesirable. To illustrate, a few months back, people of a metropolitan city raised their
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 against the construction of a metro rail bridge that could devastate the environment.
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, appropriate measures are required to solve the problem
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 as segregation of industrial areas from residential areas and insight to people regarding environmental problems.
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