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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

#university #education #people #future #life
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in recent
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decades
,
people
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 care more about
university
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education
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 than before.some individuals argue that higher
education
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 is the most important element for obtaining
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 future.while , others believe that there are a bunch of successful
people
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 who
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 not higher
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.from my point of view,higher
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 can be recognized as one of the
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 for
people
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 succession,as
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 will explain here. on the one hand,
people
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 can discover their real potential
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 higher
education
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.
university
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knowlwdge
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knowledge
 expand peoples
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horizon
 and give them proper information about the
profesion
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profession
professions
 which they want to get in future.
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,
people
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 s personal
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 will be improved because
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university
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the university
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 works on
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 vividly.
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university
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 forces students to go to hospital and
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patient
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.
therefore
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, their experience will be increased or business account s student get sufficient information about how banks are working and how
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 profits and expenditures.
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 ,nowadays being creative plays a significant role in
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an individuals
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 life.having a new idea is recognized as an important option in each career.so if someone has a fresh idea can be successful.
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 .by arriving technology and social media,
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 of
people
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 make lots of
money
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without
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with out
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without
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 any
university
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 s degree.
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 as
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 artists , comedians and models who earn
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 even more than
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professors in
university
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 and
people
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 call them successful .
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, the
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definition
 of success is changed , rich
people
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 by investing their
money
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on
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various
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the various
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company
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can earn
money
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 easily and they are recognized as a
succesfull
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successful
people
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. in conclusion, going to
university
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 can be a wise option for being successful but it is not
only
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 element. being creative is important too.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • innovators
  • vocational training
  • persistence
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  • non-traditional pathways
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