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Good facilities can be found in cities but not in the countryside. Therefore, new doctors and teachers should be sent to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 there are enormous reasons persuading
children
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 to eat junk
food
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, I do agree that
children
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 have an unbalanced diet these days. They are more dependent on unhealthy foods rather than eating healthy
food
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 and health is a major issue among
children
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 today.
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, they are overwhelmed by various diseases,
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, diabetes and heart disease. The
first
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 reason is unhealthy
food
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 adverts on the media are attractive and
children
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 get influenced by seeing them.
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, these foods add ingredients to make them tastier and more delicious than homemade
food
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. Many people believe that their parents and school must solve
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 complication as soon as possible. I completely agree that parents and school have an important role in their life,
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, they have a vital responsibility.
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, healthy
food
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 should be provided at home and school and
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, by educating
children
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 about the consequences of eating junk
food
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 we can curb the problem. In conclusion, I believe that both parents and the government should take action imidietley and make the situation better.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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