Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
To some
people
, the ones we meet at work
are not only colleagues but also
could be friends, therefore
it is a good idea to socialise with them and the friendship made with our work
partner could yield positive results. There is another point of view , however
, a view that recognizes them as only the people
we work
with.
On one hand, it is foolish to say spending time
with colleagues outside the work
hours has no merits at all. Of course, it could lead to a more friendly and more enjoyable environment and because of that it could make communication easier and help the overall
atmosphere of the office. For instance
, a working environment in which everyone could seamlessly communicate with each other would get things done much quicker than any other.
On the other hand
, while
it is true that people
normally get along well, forcing them to socialise may result in unwanted drama. In addition
to that, in order for a group of people
to function properly they should maintain boundaries and professionalism which could be damaged if they were to spend a lot of time
together . Furthermore
, it is a well known
fact that Add a hyphen
well-known
work
-life should not bleed into the personal life. For example
, when one can not differentiate between work
and personal life as a result
of spending all of their time
with just one group of people
, they are surely going to be less productive.
To conclude
, in my view, there is a balance that needs to be reached here. I think, although
socialising with partners is important because it has the potential to better the work
environment it also
has its downsides and should be kept at minimum
so it would not interfere with personal Add an article
a minimum
time
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task achievement
Your essay effectively covers both views and provides a balanced perspective. However, refining the grammar and sentence structure can enhance clarity. Try to use a mix of complex and simple sentences to maintain reader interest.
coherence cohesion
The flow of ideas is generally smooth, but working on transitional phrases can improve the reading experience. For example, instead of starting a paragraph with 'On the other hand,' you might say 'Conversely' or 'However.'
coherence cohesion
You successfully included an introduction and a well-rounded conclusion, which ties your ideas together nicely.
task achievement
You made good use of relevant examples to support your points, particularly in explaining that a social environment can improve communication and productivity.
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