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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Modern technology has promoted easy and fast access to information. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, due to all developments in different kinds of technologies, some
people
 believe it became easier and faster to obtain access to the most diverse kinds of
information
, while others think the disadvantages brought with it outweigh its benefits. From my point of view, the advantages of those innovations surpass its drawbacks as much
information
 as a person has, more free will she or he is going to have. Currently, anyone can immediately find out whatever
information
 they want by surfing on the internet, which is a true benefit to the learning process.
Furthermore
, social media makes it possible to exchange
information
 between
people
 far away from each other anywhere on earth, as fast they would be approached, mixing cultures knowledge over different matters.
Moreover
, those technological advances can
also
 help
people
, as disabled ones, to become more included in society.
Therefore
, gadgets like Siri, from Apple's, give disabled crowds more independence through the facility of asking robots for functions they are not able to do. Another advantage over it would be the cure or treatment for health diseases, which many of those improvements were only possible
due
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 these innovations.
However
,
on the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to it. With all the easy and swift access to
this
 kind of technology,
people
 are able to say no matter what they want on screens, as sometimes their speeches are not even close to reality, but mostly fake reports.
Thus
,
this
 kind of power to spread
information
 can be really dangerous if
people
 do not know how to manage it properly. Another disadvantage would be the higher use of informal speeches, like slang, and,
consequently
, resulting in an average rate of grammar spelling mistakes through dialogues. In summary, whereas it is crucial for any society to have access to
information
 in order to become more developed, it is
also
 important for
people
 to know how to filter it,
,
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 the disadvantages in its contents can even outweigh its benefits.
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