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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance sport or music and others are not . However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Certain individuals claim that some
people
 have inborn talents for
activities
such
 as sports and others are not, whereas some
people
also
 insist that anybody can become an
expert
 through teaching. In my view, a person may
also
 learn to become perfect due to personal
interest
 and
years
 of experience. Some individuals are born with talents. What
this
 means is that
people
 may become an
expert
 in certain fields
such
 as
music
 or sports
activities
 without being taught in school or any special training related to the course because they have a genetic makeup needed for
such
activities
 or because one of their parents is an
expert
 in the
field
 which make them have necessary skills needed.
For example
, the child of famous musicians in Nigeria, Femi Kuti is
also
 a professional musician without going through any training related to
music
.
Conversely
, some others believe that any person can be taught to become professional in any
field
 by showing personal
interest
.
This
 implies that
people
 may choose to gain proficiency in any
field
such
 as sports or
music
 mainly because they have an
interest
 in it.
However
, the love they have for
such
activities
 would give them opportunities to show
interest
 for them to acquire knowledge relevant to it, and until they become an
expert
 in the
field
. I equally believe that
people
 can become an
expert
 in any
field
 through their experience.
In other words
,
people
 may become a professional in
music
 or sport through the number of
years
 they have spent in practice. Most footballers acquired most of the skills needed on the
field
 through practising and the number of
years
 they have spent on the
field
 playing. In conclusion, some
people
 hold the view that certain
people
 are born with talents.
However
, I believe
people
 can learn to become an
expert
 in any
field
 through their interests and the number of
years
 spent practising.
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