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In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Truth be told, in several countries, young
adults
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 opt for staying in their
parents
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’ house
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 of moving out even after they have already finished their colleges and started to work. Despite some obvious advantages of
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 trend, I would argue that these are outweighed by the disadvantages. The option to continue to live with the
parents
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 is advantageous to some extent.
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,
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 could help young
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 to save the cost of living. When the
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 get the jobs and decide to move out, they will have to earn and save enough money to cover their basic needs
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 as paying the bills or renting the houses. Living in the
parents
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' houses gives the young
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 the opportunity to live in modest comfort without paying the expensive living cost.
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, the young could save the money for larger purposes
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 as getting married or starting a home of their own.
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,
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 can take care of their
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. In some households,
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, elderly
parents
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 having serious
illness
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 might find it difficult to live by themselves. As their kids, young
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 need to stay in the same house with their
parents
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. Despite the arguments above, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
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 young
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 can benefit from continuing to live at home with their
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, they will not know how to manage their independent lives. If the
adults
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 depend largely on their mothers and fathers, they will not have any responsibilities in the houses, which can have a harmful impact on
people
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’s later lives when they raise a family or have kids,
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.
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,
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 may feel the burden of taking care of their young adult children. Older
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 get tired easily which can restrict their enjoyment and participation in parenthood. In conclusion,
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 living in the same house with the
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 might benefit the young
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, it seems to me that the disadvantages are more significant than the possible advantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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