IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outright the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#experts #children #language #school
Some scholars believe that it is more effective to start learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 than in secondary
school
. In the modern era
language
 has become an essential part of everyday life. Many commentators are of the view that starting to learn a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 is more important, whereas others feel that at secondary
school
. In
this
essay
Add a comma
,essay
show examples
 I will examine both sides of the argument and will give my answer. Generally speaking, there are a variety of reasons why people believe that the statement gives a high outcome. Perhaps the main reason why people are in
favor
Change the spelling
favour
show examples
 of primary
school
 is because of adopting capacity. During
early
Correct article usage
the early
show examples
stages
Add a comma
,stages
show examples
 children’s brains are very sharp for catching new things.
For example
, children can speak their mother tongue at the age of 1.
Secondly
, they can easily become familiar with a different
language
 culture.
For example
, once they grow up and go for higher study it would be very difficult for them to adjust
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
 a different culture due to
language
. Despite these arguments, some people feel that it is not. Because by learning a foreign
language
 sometimes children become more habitual with foreign
language
 rather than their mother tongue.
As a result
, children slowly lose their affection for their mother tongue. In conclusion,
this
 statement is very relevant to modern society. Despite arguments to the contrary, I feel that the primary
school
 stage is more crucial than
secondary
Add an article
a secondary
the secondary
show examples
school
 to learn a foreign
language
. If a child adopts a foreign
language
 in the primary
school
 stage
then
 he can easily overcome
rest
Correct article usage
the rest
show examples
 of all barriers in life.
Submitted by mozahid414 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: