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COMPUTER AND AI ARE BEING INCREASINGLY BEING USED FOR ONLINE EDUCATION. CAN AI ENHANCES THE LEARNING EXPERIENCE? IS THIS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

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IN AN EVER-PROGRESSIVE SOCIETY, COMPUTER AND ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE ROLES ARE BECOMING MORE AND MORE SALIENT FOR EDUCATIONAL PURPOSES ON THE INTERNET PLATFORMS. IN LIGHT OF
THIS
, THE OPINION OF THE WRITER CONTENDS THAT THE STUDY QUALITY WILL BE ENHANCED BY TECHNOLOGICAL FACTORS
DUE TO
 THE AVAILABLE ACCESSIBILITY TO ONLINE MATERIALS AND YET IT IS A POSITIVE INNOVATION AS IT STIMULATE EXCITEMENT DURING THE LEARNING PROCESS. IT IS VITAL TO UNDERSTAND THAT THE AVAILABILITY OF ACADEMIC MATERIALS WILL INTENSIFY THE ACADEMIC
EXPERIENCE
.
IN OTHER WORDS
, COMPUTER OR AI CONTRIBUTORS CAN PENETRATE ONLINE INFORMATION STORAGE ANYWHERE OR AT ANY GIVEN TIME. AS A NATURAL OUTCOME, IT WOULD BE CONVENIENT FOR UTILIZERS TO SEARCH FOR EDUCATIONAL DOCUMENTS OR
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REFURBISH SELF-STUDY
EXPERIENCE
 WITHOUT CONCERN ABOUT LOCATIONAL OR TIME LIMITATIONS. TAKING WIKIPEDIA AS A REMARKABLE EXAMPLE,
THIS
 INFORMATION-PROVIDED WEBSITE WILL SUPPLY
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DETAILED INFORMATION ABOUT MOST OF THE CONCERNING ASPECTS OF OUR SOCIETY NOWADAYS. IN REGARD OF TECHNOLOGICAL APPLICATION IN ONLINE EDUCATION FIELDS, IT IS EVIDENT THAT EDUCATIONAL INSPIRATION WILL BRING A POSITIVE CHANGE TO LEARNER'S
EXPERIENCE
. TO BE SPECIFIC, COMPUTERS AND AI ARE CAPABLE OF INCREASING STUDY PACE AND PROVIDING MORE CONVENIENCE FOR THE USERS.
AS A RESULT
, STUDENTS WILL FIND ONLINE EDUCATION, WHICH IS SUPPORTED BY AI FACTORS, IS FAR MORE EFFECTIVE AND COMFORTABLE COMPARED TO TRADITIONAL LEARNING STRATEGIES. TO EXEMPLIFY
THIS
 STATEMENT,IN ASOCIAL SURVEY AT JUJUSTU HIGH SCHOOL, TUTEES PREFER ONLINE ASSIGNMENTS TO PAPER-WRITING HOMEWORK AS STUDENTS COULD UTILIZE VARIOUS ACADEMIC FUNCTIONS TO IMPROVE THE HOMEWORK OUTPUT. TAKING ALL POINTS INTO ACCOUNT, IT IS CLEARLY DEMONSTRATED THAT AI AND COMPUTER IMPLEMENT IN STUDY
EXPERIENCE
 CAN REINFORCE LEARNING OUTPUT AS A WHOLE.
HOWEVER
, IT IS
ALSO
 CLEARLY SHOWN THAT
THIS
 IS A BENEFICIAL ADJUSTMENT AS IT IS CAPABLE OF HEIGHTENING PUPILS ' EDUCATIONAL INTEREST.

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Task Achievement
Ensure a balanced presentation of arguments, including potential drawbacks or challenges associated with the use of AI in education to provide a more comprehensive exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your essay is generally well-organized, using a wider variety of linking words and phrases could enhance the flow and cohesion of your arguments.
General
Proofread to avoid the use of all capital letters throughout the essay, as it can be distracting and is typically considered incorrect in formal writing.
Content
Provided a clear stance on the topic, supporting it with relevant examples.
Structure
Structured the essay with a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Examples
Effectively used examples to support your points, such as the Wikipedia reference.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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