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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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recent-day
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, the obviously increasing number of people are enthusiastic about free reading online either adults or children, which contributes to
a great deal of
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students
 and adults will not use printed textbooks and newspapers any more.
However
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 I strongly disagree with the argument that
the
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printed
books
 will be replaced by e-book.
This
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reading
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 online and the importance of printed
books
. on the one hand, if underestimating
count
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the count
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 on printed
books
 has
deserve
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impacts
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impact
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? The answer has been proved by most of
news
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 about the reason that
students
 were so indulged in the various types of reading materials that triggered they cannot distinguish right from wrong. As a consequence of
students
 have no capacity to choose suitable information, even if adults still have
difficult
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to know
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 which are official materials they interested
.
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On the other hand
, not only
students
, but all individuals are prone to be
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distracted
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districted
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distracted
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 by those notifications that
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 on their electric products, which allow people to concentrate on
those distraction
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, rather than useful e-
books
. If
more
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 printed
book
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books
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 can be applied, it cannot need to worry about these disadvantages. In conclusion, I fully support the view that printed
books
 utilized by modern people can help them pay more attention to attractive
books
 and newspapers, which lead those citizens are far likely to enjoy the slower pace of life in comparison with the disadvantages about far
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 pieces of reading online and uncertain rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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