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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them to learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowedt o use to teach good behavior to children?

It is undeniable that teaching young
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 to understand the difference between
right
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 and wrong is extremely crucial nowadays.
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, some people think that
punishment
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 is a great way to help
children
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 to learn and become better in the future. I strongly agree with
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 opinion and
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it. On the one hand, it is essential to educate
kids
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 about
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 and wrong at an early age because of many reasons.
To begin
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 with, youngers might be a nice
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 in the future if they learn the difference between acceptable and unacceptable behaviours when they
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 small. Because when they were
children
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, they could do something wrong or make some mistakes,
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 their parents might give them some
punishment
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 that makes them never forget.
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, if a kid steals money from his mom, he may receive
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 from his mom and dad
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 as doing more housework or not watching TV for one week.
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,
kids
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 who be taught how to
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 bad and good actions can avoid committing a crime when they mature.
On the other hand
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, there
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 plenty of
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punishment
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 that
teachers
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 and parents can use to guide their
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 to go on the
right
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 path in
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. At
first
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, adults can take
kids
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' favourite things away if they do misconduct thing as well as explain to them why.
As a result
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, younger might feel
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regrettable
vegetable
 about what they did.
Secondly
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,
teachers
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 can give
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time over
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kids
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 when they do not finish their homework or cheat
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 the exams. To illustrate
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,
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 are able to ask students to stay in class one more hour after school to do homework. To sum up, giving
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 to youngers is
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 necessary to let them know the difference between
right
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 and wrong,
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, they would avoid risks in the future. Parents and
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 can discipline their
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 in
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 of
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different
 ways as long as they could help their sons and daughters recognise their mistakes and change themselves in a better way.

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