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Prison is the best punishment for criminals . Discuss .

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The severe punishment for the sake of offenders in jail. Nowadays, the number of felonies has increased,
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, stealing , a violation. These offences are caused by severe penalties or death sentences. There is a genuine concern that confinement is not the best way to find a remedy for criminals. The advocates of
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 view argue that perpetrators should be arrested . Others ,
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, disagree and believe that imprisonment is useless and unnecessary. On the one hand , those in favour of confining have valid reasons to be considered about the environment of bastille. It is a necessary evil and one which is preferable to other more extreme measures,
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 as in the US, where they have capital punishment . Some nations just can'
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 be allowed to roam free in our society . penitentiary sends out a strong message to would-be felonry . Indeed, those who have harmed other public physically or mentally should be in prison, mainly so that the victims are safe from
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 harm . For other crimes
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 as vandalism or tax evasion, it should make criminals repay the victim or society with suitable repression .
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 , there are many populations who would argue that gaol can'
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 benefit to reduce the figure of jailbirds . It doesn'
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 seem like much of a deterrent against petty crimes when these days many prisons let inmates have luxuries
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 as video games and TVs and top chefs cooking their food . Prison should be a form of punishment, not a holiday camp or a place where murderers can get a degree in psychology at the taxpayers' expense . folk do learn by conditioning . Quod is a culture much different to the part of society that we are taking these criminals away from . In conclusion , jail is a necessary evil for deterring serious crimes. But I don'
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 think prison is a particularly good way to rehabilitate some communities, as it just educates them in the ways of the criminal.
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 , the way I see it , prisons aren'
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 really that effective ,as a high percentage of prisoners re-offend once they are released back into the community .

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