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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
 believe that the diverse kind of technology that
people
 could afford makes the difference between
wealth
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wealthy
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 and poor
people
. While others may have
opposite
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the opposite
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 view. In the
next
 two paragraphs, I will give my opinion related to that discussion and provide it with appropriate arguments. With the
developing
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development
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 of technologies, we do have more choices of purchases to buy. the shops offer us the big choice of things: starting from headphones to the most powerful computers.
However
, the purchase of those products
depend
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 on your finance. the cost of these things may show your
finansial
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financial
 status in society.
On the other hand
, the marketing impacts on
people
, making them
to
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apply
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buy computers or telephones that cost a fortune, offering them
low-percent
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low-per cent
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 credits that you may pay for several years. It can be noticed from every fourth person who
own
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owns
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iPhone
iphone
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an iphone
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 in the street, even if they can not afford it to buy. So, it makes the gap between more
financial
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financially
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 stable and less stable
people
 less obvious, because you can not make any conclusions about
financial
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the financial
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 status of
person
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a person
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 just looking at them. To conclude all
previous
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previously
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 given arguments, I can say that,
people
 who tend to look better in the eyes of other
people
, will always try to pretend more successful, wealthier than they are in fact. And
that is
 why it is always easier for brands to manipulate and make them
to
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apply
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buy the things they do not need. The growing range of tech products makes a gap between
people
 of different financial statuses, but it is less obvious due to a big offer of the way of payments from the shops and marketing companies.
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