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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advantages of technology give us a lot of opportunity to develop themselves and our economy.
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, the growing of technologies are shared our
society
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 to two parts: one part become richer, another become poorer. Some
people
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 think that it is opposite effect for our
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, while others believe
conversely
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. In the following paragraphs I will present both opinions and present my perspective. Undoubtedly, the range of technologies are increased our economy and the intellect of
people
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.
People
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 become more affrodable to knowledge because technologies give us opportunity to
work
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 with our mind not by hands,
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 we safe our energy to think
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,
people
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 who take a chance, become rich: producers of TV, computers, phones and other devices,
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people
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 who can
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 with technology, because they are demanded in the market place. By the way, we know a lot of
people
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 who cannot
work
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 with devices, computers, especially elderly
people
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. It is hard for them to find jobs. Another point that
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 who
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 by hands waste their time and make less things than equipment. To illustrate
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, modern industries use equipments, few operators and manager who can control it.
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, a lot of
people
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 can find job, because workers by hands not are demanded in the contemporary world. In conclusion, it is a bog problem for our
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, and without job
people
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 cannot to educate their children and be healthy. In my point of view
people
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 have to be adapt and flexible and be open to knowledge and new resources not only to be rich,
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 to live with their
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 equally.
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