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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advantages of technology give us a lot of opportunity to develop themselves and our economy.
Nevertheless
, the growing of technologies are shared our
society
 to two parts: one part become richer, another become poorer. Some
people
 think that it is opposite effect for our
society
, while others believe
conversely
. In the following paragraphs I will present both opinions and present my perspective. Undoubtedly, the range of technologies are increased our economy and the intellect of
people
.
People
 become more affrodable to knowledge because technologies give us opportunity to
work
 with our mind not by hands,
therefore
 we safe our energy to think
For instance
,
people
 who take a chance, become rich: producers of TV, computers, phones and other devices,
also
people
 who can
work
 with technology, because they are demanded in the market place. By the way, we know a lot of
people
 who cannot
work
 with devices, computers, especially elderly
people
. It is hard for them to find jobs. Another point that
people
 who
work
 by hands waste their time and make less things than equipment. To illustrate
this
, modern industries use equipments, few operators and manager who can control it.
Therefore
, a lot of
people
 can find job, because workers by hands not are demanded in the contemporary world. In conclusion, it is a bog problem for our
society
, and without job
people
 cannot to educate their children and be healthy. In my point of view
people
 have to be adapt and flexible and be open to knowledge and new resources not only to be rich,
also
 to live with their
society
 equally.
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