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Some people think schools should teach students to form good behavior in addition to providing normal education.Do you agree or disagree.

#people #schools #students #form #behavior #addition #education
Many people opine that educational
institution
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who
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apply
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give
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a lesson
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lesson
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lessons
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 on modesty and manner to their
students
 while others think
otherwise
. In my opinion, though
home
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the home
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 is the
first
 place from where children should learn well manner,
teacher
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the teacher
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 ought to provide
lesson
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a lesson
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 and should keep their eye on
students
 attitude. Learning proper manner is a part of education, as well as , without parents children are used to spend a huge time at school which should not be the reason of
ruin
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 their
behavior
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behaviour
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.
To begin
 with, student
life
 is the time to adopt good skills ,
consequently
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 they could prosper in
life
 by using these.
For example
, truthfulness, patience , punctuation are the parts of good
behavior
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behaviour
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 which
students
 have to achieve with their
instutional
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institutional
 education to be a flawless person in future.
Secondly
,
theachers
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teachers
 are just
next
 to the parents whose guidance is followed by the
students
 as a law.
Moreover
,
teachers
 can easily read the mind of their
students
, so they can arrange
instutional
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institutional
 training to encourage the pupils to do social work
instead
 of wasting time worse fully.
On the other hand
, there have a
probab
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probably
 that , a good company can bring progress while
pessimistic
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the pessimistic
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 person is enough to vandalize one's
life
. As
students
 spend a lot at school after home,
teachers
 have to focus on their
students
 every
steps
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 and
gestures
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gesture
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.
Teachers
 would play a vital role
to
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in
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 the improvement of their
students
 educational and personal
life
 as well. By enhancing the habit of reading
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a book
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book
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books
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 or
envolving
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involving
evolving
 with
social
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a social
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 and cultural
event
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events
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 May make
students
soul
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souls
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 pure and pleasant.
As a
result
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,result
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 they will be able to concentrate
to
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on
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 their study , and they may take part
with
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in
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 innovative work by using their intelligence. To encapsulate, the worth of being well behaved is not less than institutional education.
Teachers
 have humongous duty to build the
students
 carrier not only with
a
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 best result but
also
 with
good
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a good
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personality
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personalities
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.
Well
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,Well
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behavior
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behaviour
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 is a great virtue , and it can bring merriments and
prosper
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prosperity
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 for every human.
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