In many places,new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.what is your opinion about this?

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all over the world.in numerous

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their homes for living and have no

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and few

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think that it is vital to save the village side and not develop new buildings there.I will discuss my point of view and will give my opinion that new buildings are crucial for

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and should

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in rural

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. First and foremost,

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wanted to build new

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for living

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enough space because already many

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places

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and I believe that if one family have ten

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and only one house

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enough for them.why is no space for living in

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?because nowadays,most

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prefer to live in the

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as hospitals,better schools and universities etc.

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,there are many parks and activity

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place

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people

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another

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life.

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believe that they should not

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the countryside I disagree

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this

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opinion,if we

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the rural

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leave the

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we cannot progress in any field.why

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people

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the

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rural

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?they like to live in

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bigger

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place

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and they love nature where they built

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for

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live.To illustrate,

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should stay in the village

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whereas

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no entertainment over there but they enjoy

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environment and

near

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the

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nature.

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government

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should take steps to encourage the

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locals

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local

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that

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they live in the countryside and should promote their culture and nature.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

278 words

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Urbanization
Ecological benefits
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In many places,new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.what is your opinion about this?

Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree.

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You recently stayed at a hotel conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaint.

You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter: Describe the problem the new employee has caused Explain how other employees about the new employee’s conduct Say how you expect the HR manager to address the situation.