In many places,new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.what is your opinion about this?
In all countries,
people
need to live in houses in
all over the world.in numerous Change preposition
apply
places
,individuals needed
their homes for living and have no Wrong verb form
need
place
in the cities
and few community
think that it is vital to save the village side and not develop new buildings there.I will discuss my point of view and will give my opinion that new buildings are crucial for Change to a plural noun
communities
human
and should Fix the agreement mistake
humans
build
in rural Wrong verb form
be built
areas
.
First and foremost,people
wanted to build new places
for living
and in the Change preposition
to live
cities
,there are
Change the verb form
is
no
enough space because already many Correct your spelling
not
people
live congested
Change preposition
in congested
places
and I believe that if one family have ten people
and only one house not
enough for them.why is no space for living in Add a missing verb
is not
cities
?because nowadays,most people
prefer to live in the cities
,so many facilities over there such
as hospitals,better schools and universities etc.In addition
,there are many parks and activity places
for the children that's why urban areas
have no empty place
.Fix the agreement mistake
places
Hence
,people
have to to move
another place
because of population
to continue their Add an article
the population
up coming
life.
Correct your spelling
upcoming
Secondly
,some people
believe that they should not move
in
the countryside I disagree Change preposition
to
this
opinion,if we Change preposition
with this
will
not Verb problem
do
be
Verb problem
apply
move
in
the rural Change preposition
to
areas
and not
leave the Add a missing verb
do not
cities
we cannot progress in any field.why people
Add an auxiliary verb
do people move
did people move
move
in
Change preposition
to
the
rural Correct article usage
apply
areas
?they like to live in the
bigger Correct article usage
apply
place
and they love nature where they built Fix the agreement mistake
places
a dream houses
and have huge Correct the article-noun agreement
a dream house
dream houses
space
Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
for
live.To illustrate,Change preposition
to
community
should stay in the village Add an article
the community
a community
whereas
no entertainment over there but they enjoy Correct word choice
where
fresh
environment and Correct article usage
a fresh
near
Add a missing verb
are near
the
nature.
Correct article usage
apply
To conclude
,government
should take steps to encourage the Correct article usage
the government
Fix the agreement mistake
locals
local
Fix the agreement mistake
locals
that
they live in the countryside and should promote their culture and nature.Correct word choice
apply
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