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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss

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In our modern society, the role of crimes and criminals is so peculiar that they can easily threaten citizens' lives with serious actions.
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, some people support that
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 unethical persons should be punished via
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 policies while others consider capturing in jail as a useless attempt. In
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 essay, I will try to discuss two controversial views. On the one hand, there is much society that would argue that
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 has a considerable impact on the community not to commit any crime. The major aspect is that the public who tend to be afraid of strict confinement policies
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 as capital punishment have the impulse not to violate in any case.
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, most people detest the term "
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" as they have heard about it in detail from their nears and dears with a prisoner background.
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, educating inmates in the capture may develop their attitude towards the law. And they always escape taking any action against it. Because it is typical of a man that if they have any failure once they strive not to repeat it again as always as possible.
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, society not in favour of penitentiary demands that those who cause serious death or sex offence should be punished with a more stern approach over only arresting. Because currently, the
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 is converted into a holiday camp with a soft atmosphere. What I mean by
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 is that inmates who have not had much of a home do not have the longing to leave
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 luxurious place with all conveniences. Even if they are released to our community, they can proceed with anything illegally to return to lockup. Another issue is that lockup can be a criminals' office which aids to establish a lot of non-legitimate actions. As prisoners have a long time in captivity, they manage to gather compatible companions and devise huge plans for the future prospects of the criminal world.
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, it is inevitable that confinement nurture potential academics and professors in offences. To sum up, I argue
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 offenders can be encouraged in jail, an urgent message of its rules can conserve the community from violations.
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