Some people believe that individuals who earn a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that the individuals who contribute to the society (such as scientists or teachers) are the most successful. šŸ”øDiscuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the recent
society
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,
people
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compare
success
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in two major ways.majority understands it as a way of earning a lot of
money
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while others believe that scientists or teachers are the most
successfull
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successful
as they contribute to the
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.in my opinion,
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believe that successful
people
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are the individual who earns a lot of
money
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.
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essay will discuss both views.
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,
people
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who earn
money
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are the most successful
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is because when someone can earn
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good
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,he or she can plan a good business which can eventually
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his or her economic status ,
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,
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recently got a job with wonderful payroll
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has made me to build good residentials and to be honest
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do a good outcome.The
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i
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get from the premises can be used to expand other business ideas that
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had planned like starting my own hospital.
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is what we termed as being a
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.
secondly
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,with enough
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,you can live a
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life.In my county, Kenya politicians are known for earning good
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.They live in big houses driven by the most expensive cars and get better health care services.All of these you cannot definitely do when you are not
successfull
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successful
and with
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all of these are possible.
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,Scientists or teachers can as well be successful by contributing to
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society
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directly or indirectly these are seen when actually our children perform well in schools and
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can be seen as a major
success
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for teachers.Scientist as well helps us in the weather analysis
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can help us to plan well during our planting seasons. In conclusion,
success
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can be either seen when
people
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are earning good
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or contributions to
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by teaches and scientists but on my side, I believe that only
people
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that are earning can be most
successfull
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successful
successfully
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