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People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

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In recent years, the citizens always
feeling
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 unsafe whether they are at interior home or not. In my opinion, there are plenty of reasons for
this
 issue.
However
, I strongly believe that we could take some measures to solve
this
 problem. There are numerous reasons why people do not feel safe even when they are at their own home.
First
 and foremost, the level of crimes is increasing at alarming rates. In fact, there is too much news about crimes, sexual assaults, or road accidents.
Hence
, the citizens, who see and listen to
these updated news
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 every day, feel insecure and have a fear of crime among the public.
Secondly
, frequent occurrence of natural
disasters
such
 as an earthquake or violent storms. There is no doubt that the
disasters
 destroy tons of blocks that could be dangerous for the families living here. Take Japan as an example, the people in
this
 island country has to face misfortune earthquakes or tsunamis in their daily life.
Nevertheless
, our safety can be made sure by some practical solutions. The mass media should reduce the amount of violence in newspapers, social networks, and TVs, which might prevent the insecurity feeling to citizens.
In addition
,
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governments must develop new technologies that can help minimize the damages caused by natural
disasters
.
Moreover
, more surveillance cameras should be installed, because if the public know that
such
 cameras were in place, they will think that they are being protected and have personal safety. In conclusion, the
increasing
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of
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 crimes and
disasters
 may be the main reasons that lead to the unsafe feeling from
community
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. Despite that, I believe that there is always a right way to solve
this
 serious issue.
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