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Some people believe that individuals who earn a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that the individuals who contribute to the society (such as scientists or teachers) are the most successful. 🔸Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

#people #individuals #money #society #scientists #teachers #🔸discuss
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The comparison in the amount and type of food consumed by Australian adolescents throughout a 25-year period is illustrated above by the line graph. Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that the number of adolescents who preferred to consume pizza and
hamburgers
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 rocketed up,
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 to the teenager’s given preference to the seafood and
chips
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.
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, it is worth mentioning, that the choice of
teenagers
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 to eat
hamburgers
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 by 2000 had reached 100
people
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 sharp, as it was with the demand for seafood and
chips
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 in 1975.
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 with, at the beginning of the time period shown on the graph, the demand for seafood and
chips
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 annually was much higher, 100
teenagers
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 consumed
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 type of food per year, while the number of
teenagers
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 who preferred to eat pizza and
hamburgers
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was
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 significantly lower, almost 10 and 5
people
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 respectively.
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, between 1975 and 1985, the consumption of fish and
chips
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, which was much higher at the beginning of the sample, by
teenagers
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 started to shrink until the rest of the period of time, 2000, and by
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 year, levelled off at nearly 39
people
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. In sharp contrast to
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, there was an upward trend in consumption of pizza and fast-prepared
hamburgers
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 which had peaked the highest number of young consumers by the end of 2000, 100 and approximately 85
people
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 respectively.
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