Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Developing countries need more than monetary support from developed countries to conquer privation
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. Many might argue that money is the primary requirement for economic stability as it ensures
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establishment of industries,
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power and it is the core for development as seen with cases of Ghana which was supported by
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kingdom and to attain re-evaluation of the cedis to dollars. I would rather say that financial assistance is key but
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powers have to do more in areas of human resource and capacity building which can include exchange programs and building of institutions as corruption cannot depreciate the value of human competence but can decay the value of money if mismanaged due to bad leadership or
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. Nigeria
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a typical example where
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is corrupt and loans have been collected from international institutions like
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bank and from
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powers like China without proper accountability and poor
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structure, embezzlement of
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funds
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driven without any repercussion and
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dip only commenced in 2015 when a new leader was elected which saw the naira devalued by 100% compared to the dollar but
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early 2000 when the human resource of the
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and has since been exposed to structural policies to ensure proper
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budgeting
and distribution of funds and resources to different facets of life talking about security, logistics and proper management of natural resources. In conclusion, for a leap in
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of a country from being a
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it is pertinent and imperative to gain more than financial stability in areas of human capability, infrastructures,
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industrialization
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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