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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species,while others believe that it is waste of money. What is your opinion?

#people #money #species #waste
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Pham Anh Tuan Nguyen
Copenhagen
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,
Denmark
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 +45 50389313 │[email protected] EDUCATION
Master
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 of Science in Public
Health
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 09
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2018-08
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2020
University
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 of Southern
Denmark
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 • Danish Government
Scholarship
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 (2018-2020) Doctor of Medicine Odonto-Maxillo-Stomatology 09
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2008-07
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2014 Can Tho
University
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 of Medicine and Pharmacy, Vietnam •
Scholarship
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 for outstanding academic achievements (2012-2014) CAREER RELATED
SKILLS
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 (including any technical
skills
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) • Strong analytical and
research
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skills
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 including
literature
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review
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, systematic
review
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 and scientific writing. • Proficient in statistical and
programing
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programming
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 software including Stata, Microsoft Excel, Python, R… • Ability to work independently and collaboratively in a
research
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team
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 with diverse backgrounds effectively. WORK EXPERIENCE Medical Advisor StepUp
Health
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 Solution,
Copenhagen
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 03
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2021 – 12
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2021 • Collaborated in a cross-functional
team
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 and took part in the developmental phases of a chest wearable device that measures vital parameters and detects abnormal breathing patterns to help physicians make more accurate decisions and efficacious treatments. • Conducted scientific tasks including reviewing
literature
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 and scientific reports to identify up-to-date physiological features that are vital when monitoring patients with chronic pulmonary diseases (COPD, pneumonia, asthma) that could be integrated into our medical device. • Conveyed scientific findings into explicit information, presented findings to the design and engineering
team
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, and suggest improvements in product development based on these findings. • Contacted potential organizations, academic institutions and professionals that have an interest in our business and conducted interviews with international COPD physicians about product features, asking for feedback and suggestions for improvement of products. • Prepared applications to national and international grants and funding
programs
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Research
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 Assistant & Academic instructor
University
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 of Southern
Denmark
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, Odense 09
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2019 – 01
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2020 • Participated in a systematic
review
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project
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 to identify the pattern of oral diseases in the maritime industry and were responsible for searching
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literature
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 and medical reports from scientific databases. • Extracted relevant information from selected articles and analyzed data to identify disease patterns, associated risk factors and presented the result to the
research
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team
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 through presentations and written reports. • Continued the systematic
review
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project
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 as my
master
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 thesis and accomplished with a prominent result and positive feedbacks from the dissertation council. • Assisted in teaching
activities
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 and prepared instructive materials for two courses namely “Public
Health
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 in the 21st century” and “Applied Biostatistics”. • Organized the orientation
program
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 and social events for more than 200 graduate
students
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 to introduce the campus facilities, learning techniques and promote cultural exchange
activities
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 among new
students
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.
Community
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health
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program
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 manager – Clinical doctor Cai Rang medical
center
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, Can Tho, Vietnam 11
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2014 – 08
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2018 • Be responsible for the
community
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 dental
health
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program
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 and led a
team
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 of 7 grassroots
community
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 workers to design school-based
health
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 promotion
programs
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 and implement new dental intervention
programs
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 at 15 primary schools. • Supervised the operations of
grassroot
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grassroots
 medical
centers
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 and organized periodic medical examinations for
students
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 in
Cai
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 Rang district. • Provided support to other
community
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programs
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such
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 as occupational
health
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, HIV
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AIDS, Methadone treatment and Vitamin A supplement to pregnant women and children. • Performed overall dental treatment, medical examinations and offered professional advice to outpatients in the city.
VOLUNTEER
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 AND
COMMUNITY
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ACTIVITIES
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 Event manager Food Sharing
Copenhagen
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,
Copenhagen
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,
Denmark
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 05
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2020 - Now • Collaborate with other volunteers to collect vegetables and fruits surplus from partner supermarkets and bakeries to prepare for the weekly Food Sharing events. • Lead a
team
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 of 10 volunteers to organize weekly food sharing
event
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 and deliver collected foodstuff free of charge to registered attendants including
students
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 and local inhabitants. Social work
volunteer
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 Kompasset Kirkens Korshær,
Copenhagen
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 08
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2020 – 02
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2021 • Assisted homeless immigrants and refugees at
Copenhagen
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 city in daily tasks like preparing daily meals, introducing available services and facilities at the shelter, booking airfares and job search counselling. Member Toastmaster Esbjerg 01
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2019 – 05
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2020 • Attended weekly meetings with other members to practice public speaking
skills
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 by making personal speeches or evaluating other
speaker’s
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 speeches to help them ameliorate their oratory
skills
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. Organizer
volunteer
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 19
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2019 – 21
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2019 Week of
Health
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 and Innovation (WHINN) Conference, Odense,
Denmark
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 • Worked as a
volunteer
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 organizer in one of the largest annual
health
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 innovation conferences in
Denmark
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. ACHIEVEMENT • Recipient of the Danish Government
scholarship
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 –
University
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 of Southern
Denmark
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 I was awarded the Danish
scholarship
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 including a full tuition waiver and monthly stipends for a two-year
master
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program
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 at the
University
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 of Southern
Denmark
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 from 2018 – 2020. •
Master
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 degree with distinction recognition –
University
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 of Southern
Denmark
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 Became the only student (top 1) in the public
health
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master
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 cohort 2018-2020 graduated with the distinction recognition for the outstanding accomplishment of the talent
program
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 with extra 20 ECTs.
ACTIVITIES
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 AND PROJECTS • Citizen Science
project
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 – Aging in Smart city
project
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 02
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2020 - 08
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2020 o Conducted a
community
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project
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 to investigate how technology can assist senior citizens in
Denmark
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 during the Covid-19 lockdown by engaging elderly participants in an open group discussion to share personal experience and enhance their awareness of how advanced technology can support them in daily life. •
Health
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 policies and
programs
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 regarding empowerment seafarers 02
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2021 - now
o
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Collaborate with researchers from Nordic countries in a systematic
review
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 with
research
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 tasks regarding
literature
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review
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, qualitative and quantitative data analysis and scientific writing. PUBLICATION •
Health
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 Diabetes among tuberculosis patients and its impact on tuberculosis treatment in South Asia: a systematic
review
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 and meta-analysis - Published on 22
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01
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2021 – Scientific report journal
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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