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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Some
people
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 believe that owning a
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 is more important than renting it. In my opinion,
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 statement is wholly related to each persons ‘ characteristic features and his or her perspective through life. As owning a
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 is one of the basic needs of every human being, it might be a big concern for most
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 in a society.
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 that hectic lifestyle in modern days has led
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 to stay fewer hours at home, they are still in need of a safe place to resist. In a warmer definition, accommodation gives
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 a mental calmness and reliance on having a place to live in even in their dark days. In another point of view, there is no need for
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 to worry about their monthly or annual rent by owning a
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.
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 might be helpful for saving more money while being trapped on rainy days.
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 belief might be either positive or negative for a variety of
people
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 with different characteristics. In my opinion, buying a
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 for
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 who are willing to sweep changes might not be a good idea. To clear the point, by buying a
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, it is unlikely to sell it every year or every several years, simply because the process of selling a
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 is time-consuming, especially in a bad economical situation.
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, these kinds of
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 is better to rent a residence rather than buy one.
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, it is much better to purchase a
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 to resist in for those with too many family members involved and lower budgets.
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, the family can spend their salary on more essential aspects of their lives and improvements. In conclusion, owning a
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 is totally a personal decision, and it varies in different personalities and various family situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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