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Radio will no longer be able to hold its presence as television and Internet media will replace it very soon. Do you agree or disagree?

#radio #presence #television #internet #media
without a doubt,
first
, market demands and production of
radio
 have decreased significantly as compared to other electronic devices. As the availability of various entertainment electronic
device
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devices
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 has been easily available, devices
such
 as
radio
 will gradually disappear and will be replaced with TV and computer screens. I agree with
this
 notion and the reasons to justify my viewpoint are to be explained in the succeeding paragraph. On the one hand,
radio
 is cheaper and very easy to use, yet according to sales statistic in the US published in 2019,
sale
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the sale
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 has declined nearly 80% In the local community and the older population prefers to use
radio
 as it's convenient and easy to use compared to While it is true that
radio
 has been used to provide entertainment, nowadays, various devices are available and is as equally cheap but with more added practical usage than
radio
.
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