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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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Introduction
Nowadays, family structures along with family roles are changing. Most
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 prefer to live in a nuclear family because it gives an opportunity to the
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 to be themselves.
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,
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 get more privacy when they are alone or spending
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 with their immediate family. In my opinion, these changes are positive.
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The nuclear family
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 includes immediate family members.
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, it gives
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 to be more productive in
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 a way that they will get enough
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 to spend on themselves and be more productive rather than their other family members.
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, One of my colleagues lives in an extended family. She is always stressed and complaining about her migraines as there are always tensions in her family. I think if she would be living alone or in a nuclear family so she would not have these kinds of difficult situations.
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,
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 get more privacy in a nuclear family
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. They have plenty of
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 to utilize it in their work efficiently.
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, I live in a nuclear family when I have the assignments I am able to complete them on
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 rather than having issues.
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, if I would be living in the same family
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 as in the past
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 I think it would be difficult for me to concentrate on my other priorities.
Conclusion
In a nutshell, the family
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 and family roles that have changed over the past few years have
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positive impact. The
people
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 are getting more opportunities to be productive and to be themselves.
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 to
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,
people
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 are getting more privacy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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