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Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Adolescents started to consume
drugs
 these days regardless of their impacts. Both ways to find
drugs
 and prices about
drugs
 are the reason why
drugs
 are being consumed by teenagers.
Drug
 addiction can have an impact on their life. In our society, the
drug
 is becoming more and more accessible for anyone include young
people
. It can be purchased from adults or even some
friends
 from schools, and its price is reasonable even teenagers can buy it.
For example
, in Thailand, the price of
drugs
 is scarily cheap, if you have only 2 dollars, you can
also
 buy them in
this
 country. When young generations consumed too many
drugs
, they will not be in the right mind and can become aggressive towards other
people
. The worse case that can happen is that
drug
 users have hallucinations and try to attack or kill
people
 in their families,
then
 their relationships with family or
friends
 will certainly change since those
people
 will afraid of them. Adults in families and teachers in schools should educate their children and students why they cannot use
drugs
 and give them an example of
people
 who once used
drugs
. Parents should observe their children, and try to ask about their
friends
 in schools if parents know that their children are close with some
friends
 who addict to
drugs
, the parents will have a chance to fix problems before it is too late. In conclusion, in some countries,
drugs
 are cheap and can purchase by anyone even they are still underage so teenagers in those countries will have more chances to engage in
drugs
.
In addition
,violence can happen from
drug
 users,
therefore
people
 in their families can be put in dangerous situations.
People
 should teach young generations more about the effects of
drugs
.
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