Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
this
technological era, markets and businesses are expanding on a large scale.
Besides
this
, some low-level professions got affected and they are not able to participate and because of
this
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some individuals opine that due to
this
progress regional occupations are ending.I completely disagree with
this
statement and the following paragraphs will describe my viewpoint.
To begin
with, in
this
modern era ,there are so many opportunities are available nowadays to expand small-scale occupation. With the inclining advancement of ,outlets the local business is got benefitted.
Moreover
, most behind the mall stores material there is always mini trading company involved.
In addition
to
this
,handmade things are more in demand which is an example of a tiny occupation.
Furthermore
, with the growing advancement, more local things are getting in demand. For ,example some traditional designs on cloth only can be done by a person who knows completely about it and machines are not able to do that.
Further
, if a person wants to open a brand with cultural design he/she needs to find that folk who knew about heritage more and have some experience in it . In that , away small businessmen can collab with them and promote their work. To conclude, with the elevation of shopping centres it is creating an opportunity for local commuters to promote their business.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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