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Topic: Some sociologists say that, it is a waste of time for students to pursue secondary education for 12 years. It is better to shorten it to 9 years only, then go to vocational school to learn a skill applied in their jobs or go to university to get a degree. To what extent do you agree with this?

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Urbanization has led to the development of open
spaces
 in the offices and demolished the plan of separate rooms. It accounts for more benefits to the employers with certain limitations as well. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss the merits and demerits of the above-mentioned notion and will opine in favour of the former statement. To commence with, open
spaces
 offer more advantages than separate rooms. It provides more
spaces
 for employees as one large hall can accommodate more than 50 workers at a time. Call centres, nowadays,
for instance
, have enough cubical blocks for almost all staff.
In addition
 to that, it is far cheaper for employers to look for a working environment at instant
instead
 of moving into different
spaces
. To exemplify, they only install two or three security cameras, which rotate in every possible direction to check the security of the required place.
Thus
, employers are overall benefitted.
In contrast
, working in an individual room can be more peaceful and confidential discussion only require private
space
instead
. Precisely, interviews can be conducted in quiet places rather than noisy ones. On top of it, separated
space
 in offices is required because some matters need concentration and a more focused environment.
For example
, research project activity demands more mindfulness than simply doing customer service. Being a research officer back in 2017, I always required personal
space
 for analysis and statistics of data. it really has some advantages as well. To capitulate, open
spaces
 account for more benefits
such
 as larger accommodation capacity, fewer expenses for security cameras and less
space
 requirement for open office.
However
, concerning some limitations as noisier, less mindfulness cannot be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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