Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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It is disheartening to say that on
one
hand humans are doing more and more upliftment in every field
however
, on the other ,hand the committed crime rates are
also
increasing. As in recent
era
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major
amount
offences are committed by adults in developing countries. There are several reasons behind
this
trend
however
, some solutions are there to resolve these issues. There are numerous reasons behind these. The
first
and foremost is that nowadays in
this
contemporary era most of the bigger firms, as well as some petty business, the business
also
wants higher qualified people
as a result
of that the
one
who has no higher academic degrees, are not able to survive and does not fulfil their dreams even if they have interpersonal skills but because of the
qualification
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they might not select by
this
companies. Another reason is that because of poverty more
crimes
are done by the youngsters.
Furthermore
, because their parents do not have enough money to pay the required
amount
of fees for education so,
as a result
, they join in some petty
crimes
first
like drunk driving.
Moreover
, following these
crimes
and joining with the bigger gangs like terrorists.
However
, some solutions can be taken to solve these problems. The
first
one
is that the centre of the specific city should invest some money for education to those parents who can't afford the tuition fees. The
second
one
is that small and bigger businesses should recruit more youngsters
instead
of seeing their qualifications they should show their inner talent and skills. By taking
this
amount
of steps I think they can
also
fulfil their daily needs because after doing that they
also
have some
amount
of money on their hands. In conclusion, there are several reasons for
crimes
committed by juveniles like poverty ,
however
, some solutions that are mentioned above should be taken to overcome
this
trend.
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