Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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hand humans are doing more and more upliftment in every field

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, on the other ,hand the committed crime rates are

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offences are committed by adults in developing countries. There are several reasons behind

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, some solutions are there to resolve these issues. There are numerous reasons behind these. The

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and foremost is that nowadays in

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contemporary era most of the bigger firms, as well as some petty business, the business

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wants higher qualified people

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who has no higher academic degrees, are not able to survive and does not fulfil their dreams even if they have interpersonal skills but because of the

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they might not select by

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companies. Another reason is that because of poverty more

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are done by the youngsters.

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, because their parents do not have enough money to pay the required

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of fees for education so,

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, they join in some petty

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like drunk driving.

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, following these

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and joining with the bigger gangs like terrorists.

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, some solutions can be taken to solve these problems. The

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is that the centre of the specific city should invest some money for education to those parents who can't afford the tuition fees. The

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is that small and bigger businesses should recruit more youngsters

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of seeing their qualifications they should show their inner talent and skills. By taking

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of steps I think they can

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fulfil their daily needs because after doing that they

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have some

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of money on their hands. In conclusion, there are several reasons for

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committed by juveniles like poverty ,

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, some solutions that are mentioned above should be taken to overcome

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Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays, more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same job. What problemes does this came? What are some possibles solutions?

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion.

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should pearn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.