Some people believe that travelling is a memorable experience whereas others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is irrefutable that nowadays, travelling has become more and more popular among
people
. It is considered by many that travelling gives unforgettable memory,
whereas
,
other
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others
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opine that
this
behaviour is
completely
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waste of time
as well as
money
.
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essay will not only discuss both views but
also
my opinion will be highlighted
while
condoning. On
one
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hand, there are some reasons why
people
deem that travelling
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is the best way to build
memorable
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a memorable
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experience because it gives
best
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exploser
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experience
and
learns
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teaches
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about a different culture. So
people
can get information related
culture
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as well as
know that
place
which they travelled
.
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As
result
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,
that is
very helpful
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an unforgettable experience.
For example
,
people
who are travelling
historical
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place
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places
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. They have a chance to learn about the history of that
place
and they experience that
place
.
Moreover
,
people
build more relationships with local
people
by travelling.
On the other hand
, there are many causes why
people
believe that travelling which not only is waste of time but
also
of
money
. Travelling needs
fund
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funds
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which is for booking hotel
ticket
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tickets
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and other expenses where
people
spend
money
. So
people
who want travel some places. They need more
money
because those places are more expensive in terms of food and accommodation. As
result
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,
people
would spend
hefty
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amount of
money
on travelling
therefore
, they do not have not sufficient funds for retirement.
For example
,
People
would travel
such
as London and New York. The places need around 1 million INR which is huge for middle-class
family
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families
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people
think that travelling is not value for
money
.
To conclude
,
although
travelling requires more funds, it gives lifelong memory until death. I deem that travelling is the best way to learn about the culture and traditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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