Some people believe that travelling is a memorable experience whereas others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is irrefutable that nowadays, travelling has become more and more popular among
people
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. It is considered by many that travelling gives unforgettable memory,
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other
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others
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opine that
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behaviour is
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waste of time
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money
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This
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essay will not only discuss both views but
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my opinion will be highlighted
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condoning. On
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hand, there are some reasons why
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deem that travelling
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is the best way to build
memorable
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a memorable
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experience because it gives
best
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the best
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exploser
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experience
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learns
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teaches
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about a different culture. So
people
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can get information related
culture
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as well as
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know that
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which they travelled
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As
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,
that is
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very helpful
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an unforgettable experience.
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,
people
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who are travelling
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place
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places
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. They have a chance to learn about the history of that
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and they experience that
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,
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build more relationships with local
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by travelling.
On the other hand
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, there are many causes why
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believe that travelling which not only is waste of time but
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of
money
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. Travelling needs
fund
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funds
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which is for booking hotel
ticket
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tickets
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and other expenses where
people
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spend
money
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. So
people
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who want travel some places. They need more
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because those places are more expensive in terms of food and accommodation. As
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,
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would spend
hefty
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amount of
money
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on travelling
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, they do not have not sufficient funds for retirement.
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,
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would travel
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as London and New York. The places need around 1 million INR which is huge for middle-class
family
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families
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people
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think that travelling is not value for
money
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To conclude
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,
although
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travelling requires more funds, it gives lifelong memory until death. I deem that travelling is the best way to learn about the culture and traditions.
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the essay prompt, providing a balanced discussion of both views and a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas are logically connected throughout the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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