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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles ourweigh the disadvantages?

In years to come, whole
transports
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transport
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including
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systems including
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 automobiles, public
transports
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transport
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 and trucks will be operated without drivers.
People
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 will use them for a reason, as a
passanger
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passenger
. There are numerous benefits and drawbacks of
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 phenomenon. I believe, autopilot system of vehicles
more
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benefitial
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beneficial
 for us. In
this
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 condition. Let's begin by looking at
profits
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the profits
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 of
human~free
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human-free
 drive. Vehicles become much safer as
people
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 do not operate them. Because
people
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 can
loose
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 control
on
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 driving cars because of state of being drunk or ill.
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,
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incidents like stealing the
schoolbuses
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buses
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 by shooting the driver will be less
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 if
bus
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the bus
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 is operated automatically.
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, traffic
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 will be
considerable
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 less than now. Transport producers feature vehicles with
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a navigation
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 system, which helps to detect traffic jam routes and use possible
congestion~free
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congestion-free
road
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roads
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instead
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.
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 can improve common congestion issues.
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,autonomous transports perfectly follow
trafffic
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traffic
 rules.
People
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 may not drive carefully as artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
do
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. It can reduce the number of car accidents on the road.
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,
autopilot
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the autopilot
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 system may be the reason for
arising some problems
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some problems arising
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.
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, in big urban areas
imlementing human~free
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implementing human-free
 drive may cause a massive job loss.
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, there is still
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 misbelief
to
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 artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
 as some
people
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 consider that it lacks of ability
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judgements
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judgments
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.
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, the benefits of autopilot driving are superior to its drawbacks. It has
great
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 impact on
people
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's health and life. Its cons can be dissolved with the help of technology.

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Task
Be clear in one view at the start. Say if you are for or against driverless cars.
Structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Use 'first', 'also', 'but' to link ideas.
Language
Fix the grammar and spelling. Use short, simple form and easy tense.
Content
Use good examples. Avoid facts that are not right or are not easy to prove. Keep ideas on topic.
Strength
The essay shows a real effort to talk about driverless cars.
Strength
There are some good ideas on safety and how flow of road can be better.
Strength
There is a clear end that sums up the view.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless
  • car
  • bus
  • truck
  • passenger
  • travel
  • safe
  • safety
  • risk
  • accident
  • crash
  • traffic
  • time
  • cost
  • job
  • work
  • law
  • rule
  • policy
  • insurance
  • privacy
  • hacking
  • systems
  • road
  • city
  • fuel
  • energy
  • environment
  • design
  • change
  • trust
  • plan
  • repair
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