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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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As per the specialist, it has been said that during elementary education a youngster should learn an external
language
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 in place of high school. In my opinion, the negative impact exceeds the positive impact.
As adding
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 a different dialect can disbenefits the
education
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 background of a child.
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 with the drawbacks,
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 of a foreign expression will overload the academic studies of a student which may lead to confusion among their own
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, if an individual is given
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a
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various
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language
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 to learn at
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 early age,
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 he or she may not be able to coup up their mother tongue due
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complication
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 of different words can occur.
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, it may cause a lack of time management among the primary children’s as most of the time will
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 by the studies and due to
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a
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 least amount of time will be free for other activities.
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, positive aspects of
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 trend can help a child with their future goals.
A knowledge
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Knowledge
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 about different
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language
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languages
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 is an additional point for an individual which may
benefits
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 them in their life.
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, in our
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 English is a subject which was introduced a while ago, so from elementary school onwards English was kept as an additional
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 and it has helped a considerable number of students in their respective lives. To conclude,
although
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inclusion
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 of a foreign expression is beneficial in terms of future aspects,
but
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the drawbacks outweigh the advantages as it may cause
an
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uncertainty in
education
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the education
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 process of a child.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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