In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, travelling is becoming a popular hobby of many

people

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. It i

s argue

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that going on holiday in d

ometic

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will be trendy. In my opinion, I disagree with

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statement, and I believe that

people

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will choose abroad journeys for their vacations.

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, there are many interesting factors of

travel

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abroad which affect v

isitter's

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visitor's

visiter's

destinations.

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, some breathtaking views of Korea have been expressed in the movie "Hometown cha cha cha", a top movie on Netflix in 2021, leading Vietnamese audiences w

ant

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to visit the Busan beach to feel the relaxing picturesque villages like

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film.

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, because of the d

eveleped

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developed

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of social platforms

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as Facebook, I

nstargram,

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Instagram

people

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can see a lot of reviews, pictures and blogs about t

he a

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apply

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ttractive places in the world.

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, they will be curious and want to explore t

he o

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apply

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ther countries with various beautiful scenes.

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, the conditions to

travel

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abroad are reasonable w

ith

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for

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humans.

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, many international flights are becoming cheaper and more c

onvenience

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than t

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in the

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past.

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, tourists could select the most suitable flight for their expenses.

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, they

also

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can access a ton of information through the

travel

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agents. These companies provide the a

fforable

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affordable

travel

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packages including a

ccommomdation,

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accommodation

transportation and tours in the attractive places which make tourists feel easier to go. A

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my experience,

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summer, my mother and I visited Thailand by an all-in package tour, we s

hown

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around many sightseeings with a tour guide with a

prices

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prices

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as cheap as a trip to Da nang, a p

opurlar

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popular

holiday place in Vietnam. To conclude, I believe that t

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large number of information and the favourable conditions to go h

oliday

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on holiday

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on foreign will make

people

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choose to visit other countries rather than their own country.

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