In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, travelling is becoming a popular hobby of many
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will be trendy. In my opinion, I disagree with
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statement, and I believe that
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will choose abroad journeys for their vacations.
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, there are many interesting factors of
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abroad which affect v
isitter's
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destinations.
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, some breathtaking views of Korea have been expressed in the movie "Hometown cha cha cha", a top movie on Netflix in 2021, leading Vietnamese audiences w
ant
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to visit the Busan beach to feel the relaxing picturesque villages like
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film.
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, because of the d
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of social platforms
such
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as Facebook, I
nstargram,
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can see a lot of reviews, pictures and blogs about t
he a
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ttractive places in the world.
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, they will be curious and want to explore t
he o
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ther countries with various beautiful scenes.
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, the conditions to
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abroad are reasonable w
ith
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humans.
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, many international flights are becoming cheaper and more c
onvenience
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than t
he
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past.
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, tourists could select the most suitable flight for their expenses.
Additionally
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, they
also
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can access a ton of information through the
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agents. These companies provide the a
fforable
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travel
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packages including a
ccommomdation,
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transportation and tours in the attractive places which make tourists feel easier to go. A
s
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my experience,
last
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summer, my mother and I visited Thailand by an all-in package tour, we s
hown
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around many sightseeings with a tour guide with a
prices
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as cheap as a trip to Da nang, a p
opurlar
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popular

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holiday place in Vietnam. To conclude, I believe that t
he
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large number of information and the favourable conditions to go h
oliday
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on holiday

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on foreign will make
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choose to visit other countries rather than their own country.

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