In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In many countries, many
people
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are using mobile phone
apps
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for paying for
things
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. It has more advantages than
disadvantages
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. There are many advantages of using mobile
apps
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to pay for
things
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Firstly
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, it will be able to help
people
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save time when they need to pay
money
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for some
things
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, we can pay electric bills or water bills just by some clicks on mobile
apps
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and don’t need to go to banks, it has just taken some minutes to do.
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, it can save
money
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for us without using any cash and don't need to pay extra fee for
things
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,
people
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don't need to pay
money
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for traffic to go to some places where we need to pay bills.
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, it is more useful for
people
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when they are paying for
apps
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People
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need
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kind of payment to make our life more modern. (Society needs
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kind of payment to make our life more modern.)
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, it
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has some
disadvantages
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of using mobile phone
apps
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to pay for
things
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, convenience can make us consume when we use mobile
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to pay for online shopping.
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, hackers can take your information through the Internet when you do online payments.
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, customers will lose control when they buy clothes or equipment from mobile
apps
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because it's easy to click on
apps
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to buy some
things
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why online shopping can make us can not save our
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. And if we do some online payments through the internet, hackers will easily take our private information to steal
money
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from credit cards or bank accounts In conclusion, paying for
things
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using mobile phone
apps
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has some
disadvantages
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. But it has more advantages than
disadvantages
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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