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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors, may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it?

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These days many educated and highly skilled people are struggling to get a decent
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 and quite a lot are unemployed.
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 essay will
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 look at two main reasons causing
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 problem, and
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 explore solutions for it. The primary reason for
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 is due to a huge economic recession from the global pandemic. As the economic situation has worsened, many companies have to lay off their employees to reduce their expenses and maintain their stability.
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, in 2020, many airlines in Thailand
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 as Thai Airways, Air Asia and Lion Air, discharged their workers, leaving more than a thousand experienced staff unemployed. Another reason is competitive society due to the increasing population and limited
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 vacancies. The
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 applicants are expected to be flawless, while employers get to pick and choose or even provide the employees with low salaries.
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, most highly educated people often stay jobless until they get the desired
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 which is rare to happen. So
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 causes
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 vacancies too. In order to solve
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 situation, proper measures from the government should be immediately imposed.
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, the government should subsidize private companies so that they can maintain their own staff or even recruit a new one.
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, the pandemic should be gotten rid of as soon as possible to regain economic stability.
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, more jobs should be offered to minimize the rate of competition.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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