the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps compared some changes
of
the pathway connected to the City Hospital in two different years.
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in
Overall
, it is noticeable that the transport system of the roadway access to the hospital was considerably upgraded in 2010. There were two roundabouts at hospital road
, located on the north side and south side respectively.
According to
the maps, there were six bus stops on hospital road
in 2007 while
there was a big bus station consisting of all the stops in 2010, on the western end of hospital road
, which was much more organized. Otherwise
, the bus station was linked to two roundabouts, one on the ring road
and another one on city
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the city
road
.
In addition
, at the eastern end of hospital
Correct article usage
the hospital
road
, there was a shared carpark
both for staff and the public in 2007. Correct your spelling
car park
By contrast
, the car park was only for hospital workers to use in 2010, and a new car park for the public was built nearby the hospital, which was on the east side.Submitted by Shirleyfishfish on
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