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Computers are becoming essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion

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It has been over decades, from the day that the
computer
 has been developed into
this
 world. The
computer
 played an essential role in many things
such
 as in research, business, and technology or even in education due to
advantages
 of its.
However
, we cannot ignore the fact that
computer
also
 has
disadvantages
. The following paragraph will be discussing the
advantages
 and
disadvantages
,
therefore
 the conclusion and my opinion have been reached.
To begin
 with, there are many
disadvantages
 of
computers
such
 as prices that might be too expensive for many families to afford and even if families that can afford, many
kids
 would use it to play games or do other things rather than use it for education.
Also
,
computers
 can make the quality of
classes
 worse than using the old traditional stuff like books because
kids
 will attract to
computers
 not the content of the
classes
 by doing other things while
teachers
 teach on
computers
.
However
, for
advantages
,
computers
 provide more varieties of the
classes
 more than the old traditional like video clips for learning, or activities on
computers
.
Also
, it made
kids
 can access what they want to know on
computers
 which might make them earn some inspiration for their future.
Lastly
,
computers
 can be tools for students and
teachers
 in various ways
such
 as calculating the complex numbers in maths for students or predicting some results in the class for
teachers
 which they can observe and improve the quality of
classes
. To summarise, according to the
disadvantages
 and
advantages
, I believe that in the present, the
computer
 is already become an essential thing for many groups of people in the education field not even for
kids
 and
teachers
also
 for parents.
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