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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
people
 around the world can see or watch advertising everywhere, you can see it on books, magazines, televisions or the internet. And we have to admit that some
people
 think
advertisements
 really don't need to show us.
Besides
, others say that advertising will improve our lives. In my opinion, I agree with the crowd who said advertising will improve human's life. In
this
 21st century, we need to live with technologies and sciences and huge development needs a giant production. So all the producers want to share their products with us to make money and want to help the world grows better to include as the increase about economics, cultures, knowledge and that it is necessary
advertisements
 tell to everyone about new items to know how to use a new product in reality and population can update information about technologies or sciences through advertising.
For instance
, I saw many
advertisements
 on the internet, books, televisions or radio. It is true that all of the commercials helped me a lot to know about technology development day by day and guide me on how to use a new product for my life. It's really useful because after watching a video show about a new product I can buy some new items that were useful and save time for myself.
Such
 as some modern types of furniture or equipment to bring to our lives have more interesting.
For example
, I can use a smartphone an easy way after I watched advertising about Apple on Youtube. In conclusion,
people
 can have different thinking about
advertisements
. Some
people
 may say it's necessary, others say no. But I agree with the crowd who says it can improve our lives. To my view, I totally agree with them.
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