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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #cost #fuels #cars #vehicles
The importance of
environment
, which was always debatable how to save that many
people
 are deeming that
one
 of the best ways to solve that problem is to raise the cost of
fuels
 for cars and other transport.
In addition
,I completely disaccord with the statement
also
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate on my viewpoint. On
one
 hand, there are myriad reasons why I disagree with the statement but the
first
 and foremost
one
 is that
price
 of
fuels
 would increase it is not more effect on
environment
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.
That is
 why the high
price
 of
fuels
 occurs imbalance in society because the high
price
 of
fuels
 afford only high-class
people
,whereas, the middle-class public cannot afford
this
fuels
 so it is not possible that usage of fuel reducing by
this
 way.
Moreover
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 civilians should focus on other alternatives
such
 as e-bike as well as public transport. By
this
environment
 is more effective to protect them.
As a result
, long term results can be attained. Another worth considering the alternative to improve our
environment
 which is the best way is using friendly
fuels
 of automobiles. It is useful for reducing not only toxic air but
also
 increased levels of life.
Therefore
,
people
 can live a long life without any hustle.
For example
,
people
 can use automobile
fuels
 like CNG and LPG that types of automobiles
that
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 are considered eco-friendly fulefules. To conclude,
although
 according to the argument
one
 can reach a conclusion is increasing
fuels
price
 is not worth it to save
environment
 problems,using another way like e-vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental preservation
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Green technologies
  • Alternative energy sources
  • Renewable energy
  • Fuel-efficient vehicles
  • Electric vehicles (EVs)
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic impact
  • Consumer behavior
  • Disproportionate effect
  • Government subsidies
  • Comprehensive policies
  • Cost-effective solutions
  • Carbon footprint reduction
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