Obesity was once considered a disease of adults; however, it is becoming increasingly common among children. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to help children stay healthy?

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overweight

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much common among the adults, but ,at

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day and age, the number of

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obese

teenager

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is increasing. In my perspective,

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technology is the main cause of

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phenomenah

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phenomena

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limits of

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and

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extra

external

physical

class

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in school might be the way to tackle

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preoblem

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problem

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as they have now. They

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spending

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their

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time

on

palying

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playing

and

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doing

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out door

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activities which require them to move

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generally

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internet

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of

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they don't move much as they used to.

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, the percentage of the

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website

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young people increased over the past few years. To support

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research from the world health company shows that playing

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cause behind the

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obesity

among

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young boys whereas youtube is the

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reason for the

overwight

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overweight

oversight

young girls. One possible way to tackle

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issue

is to spread

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awairness

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awareness

between both parents and young people about the

effetc

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effect

effects

of wasting much time using the

devises

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devices

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on their health.

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, convey the

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ideal

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that the parents have the

autority

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authority

to limit the use of the internet for their children

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especially

when it

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to

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the point of causing health

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issues

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proplem

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problem

is to add additional fitness

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class

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in school. By

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doing

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, the children will work out

regulary

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regularly

as it is part of their

class

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. In conclusion,

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of the technology

revelotion

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revolution

that

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happened

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the past few

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decades

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, the obesity among young people rise.

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Furthermore

, we can solve

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by increasing the

awaerness

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awareness

and adding work out

class

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in school as a part of the

the

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students weekly

schedual

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schedule

.