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Museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not by local people. Why is this so? What could be done to encourage more local visitors. Please include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

It is unquestionably true that every nation has its history which preserved in various
places
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 called historical
places
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 and
museums
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.
People
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visit
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 these
places
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 at different times and occasions, but another fact is that nowadays tourists
visit
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 more on these
sites
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 than the local ones. I would discuss various reasons and their solutions in the below paragraphs. There are many reasons for
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.
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 and foremost, most locals have been growing up in their area and have been studying all historic
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 for a long time and do not want to
visit
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 local
museums
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 and historical
places
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 anymore. Locals already visited their attractions many times and did not interest anymore, unlike tourists. The
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 reason is, mostly the locals are busy in their daily work and they do not have free time but if they get free time they preferred to commute far away to do some adventurous activities rather than to
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 the local
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.
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, the lack of promotion. All the historical
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 are taken care of by the government. The authorities do not spend money on advertising to promote the
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 on different media sources like the internet, TV.
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 but not least, another reason is the entrance fee; the authorities of these
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 charge a hefty amount as an entrance fee, which reduces the number of
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 mainly local to
visit
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 heritage
sites
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. There are some possible solutions which can attract local
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 to
visit
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museums
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 and historical buildings.
First
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 is, the government should organize events
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 as exhibitions, cultural activities on these
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 to allure more
people
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 towards the place.
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 is, authorities not only promote the
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 on different media but
also
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 give some offers like ticket discounts to local
people
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 on selected days.
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, the school can give assignments related to the history of a country because
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 will motivate parents to take their children to the historical
museums
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 to collect useful information which will help them to get good marks in their studies or dancing show for children. To recapitulate, it is clear that local
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 avoid visiting
museums
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 and historical buildings due to their fees and some other reasons so, it is the duty of the government to give a modern look to these
sites
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 and should organize events in these
places
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 to attract native
people
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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